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Shatter Glass by ~Ilarion:iconIlarion:





Clear cut, smooth to the touch
chiming sound as fingers caress,
discordant chords echoing
through the coldness of the empty air.
Curves, eccentric in their grace,
seductive in the creation of the
chaos that they form.

Crystal light, break up, split white
makes red,
orange
yellow
green
blue
indigo
violet.
Colours, colours reflected against the
suffocating walls of here.


But no matter the beauty of form
No moment of perfect light, nor
essence of crafted art.
In us all there is a power.
Forceful, compelling, an ugliness
that yearns for nothing except
utter chaos of light and
destruction of form.

Strive for balance,
hold on to your soul.
For no one knows when it shall fall.
Fatal movements.
Ending blow.

Shatter glass.
©2004-2009 ~Ilarion
:iconilarion:

Author's Comments

Hey guys. i was bored in a free in college, so thought id ave a little writing session. To b absoloutly truthful, i needed an excuse to sit outside sumones classroom so i cud c thm wen thy came out... im sooo bad...

Erm, it strtd out as jst a random poem about a glass. it changed halfway thru, as u'll c, nd to b honest, i dnt no wot it has turned out as. need ur help on tht score... i like it tho, so i hope u do to!!

NO MORE KEYSKILLS!!!!!!!!!!!

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:iconkollapzdkitten:
i do like that, hjowever having "here" on a differnt line bugs me, not becasue it really shouldnt be, but becasue it seems to be enjembement that doesnt flow as 'randomly' ads in the rest of the poem, its as if it did break the sdentence rather than it flowing on to two lines. if this was intention then i beg your pardon :) i shall c u soon mr moss. i still like the last stanzza, very deep
:iconilarion:
ur right. im changin it. i actually didnt notice tht, but readin it thru, it does kinda break the flow dnt it... *scampers off to do sum quick editing*

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Dream as though you will live forever...
Live as if you will die today...

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:iconmr-los-philos:
yeh, that is a groovy piece, there's jus one thing that iz botherin me, the word 'accept', the way you've written the poem, i think you mean 'EXCEPT' :nod:

but 'part from tht, it iz pretty cool...

nice one :thumbsup:
:iconcasual-hero:
pretty funk my man, rock oneth!

:dance:

i like the images and selection of words uesd

go u

:wave:

the casual hero
:iconamythist-tears:
Hummmm - I thought I commented on this - but I guess I didn't submit it!!! Arh! Yeah - I love the use of colour in this, the immages it creates reminds me of autum leaves but the really prettyful kind with all different colours... *sobs*
Yeah neway - tis gorgeous!
Nat x

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:iconbriefrespite:
"discordant cords echoing"

did you mean chords?
s'random

good piece :p

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:iconilarion:
yeah, i did... thnx for pointin t out!!

--
Dream as though you will live forever...
Live as if you will die today...

:meditate:MoSsY:meditate:
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:iconblackravenwing:
Nice work :D loved the way you put each colour of the rainbow on a seperate line, it acted as though they were falling (like pieces of shattered glass ;) ). Lovely images. And okay i would put a longer comment but my computer is complaining about lack of disk space so I gotta run but i loved it - great writing for a bored moment :D

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Imagination is the one weapon in the war against reality.
-Jules de Caultier

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